Criticism welcome! :)

Hello all!

If you watched A Tangled Web, and you saw even the smallest mistake, please let me know! We’re looking for as much constructive criticism as possible. Because the more mistakes we can catch now, the less cheesy our films will be in the future!

Tell me your honest opinion, along with a short description of what the problem you saw was.ย  Of course, when we were editing, we noticed tons of mistakes and inconsistencies, but we probably didn’t notice them all. So, please, help up stay away from cheese in our films by commenting below!

Thanks!

 

P.S. If you haven’t watched A Tangled Web, simply go to our Projects page, and hit theย  “play” button.

Cheese

43 thoughts on “Criticism welcome! :)

  1. Hi Guys! It’s been a few days since I watched the film, but in that time, there are only 3 things that still stick out upon reflection: #1. The beards were “cheesy”, but I thought it was real cute! So I’m not sure what you were going for, but if it was realism, then you probably didn’t achieve that. If it was for a more whimsical thing, then you did achieve that! Lol! #2. There was a scene in a truck where it was very difficult to hear what was being said. That camera angle only lasted about 5 seconds tho. #3. Lastly, there was a scene where Faith was still supposed to be up on the top of the mountain, and I saw her in the background, walking about 20? feet behind the white excursion, I believe it was. I just loved the movie, and I love how ya’all are learning about the movie business this way, from creating a believable story, to acting it out, filming, editing…SO MUCH INVOLVED!!! And KNOW YOU KNOW!! Elijah, my creativity does not run along these lines at all!! (I’m more of an edit-photos-and-clipart kind of artsy person. And I love journaling about my kids’ and my lives!) But as far as CREATING an interesting story, and developing plot, suspense, and characters, that’s just a mystery to me!!! So I am completely awed by what you and your family have been able to achieve!! I hope that in future movies, there will be roles for Peter and Hannah, as well as more time developing Faith’s talents and diversity of what she can do, she was fantastic in this! As were you, David, and Noah! (I’m sorry, I don’t know your friend’s names! And of course I love seeing my Dear Friend Heather in her first movie!!!) โค

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  2. Over all, it’s a fantastic movie! I’m not picky about being a perfectionist! I really don’t like to criticize anybody’s work unless I can do the same thing and better… which I can not do! You did great!
    I did notice stuff being in the back of the truck, like a bike and that big white thing and then in anther scene, it wasn’t there.
    I think there were some people seen when they weren’t suppose to be seen. At one time it was at 40 minutes and other time I can’t find right now.
    I’ll let you know if I find any else noticeable, but it really is a good movie!

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  3. Here we go.:) Actors we good but some a little stiff. Please edit more carefully. Video was good in places. Never be in a hurry. Never put online until half done, Sweeties. Always go for excellence in what ever you do. Love in Christ Jesus.

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  4. The movie was awesome overall! I noticed it did drag on a bit in the beginning and some of the acting wasnโ€™t very clear. The beards/mustaches (whatever they are called these days) were a little annoying yet silly.

    I wasnโ€™t able to watch the whole thing but those are the things I noticed the most๐Ÿ™‚

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    1. Alright! Thank you very much for your input! ๐Ÿ™‚
      Yes, the beginning did go pretty slow! And…it wasn’t all in the acting, it was also the directing. Because I wasn’t exactly sure how to direct, so the actors weren’t able to do the best job!
      Okay, no more cheap mustaches in the future! =)
      Thanks for watching it!

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  5. Hey Elijah! I love that you are looking to recieve constuctive criticism in an effort to improve your films! Here are my thoughts, both comlimentary and critical:

    First off, this film has some very good storytelling – vibrant characters, funny humor, exciting drama, and great themes. I also like how at first some aspects, like the “thirsty truck,” feel random, but it all fits together in the end like a puzzle. That really enhanced the story.ย 
    One area that could have been better was that in a few places, the scenes lagged – showing things that are not necessary. For example, showing details such as the truck backing up and pulling out of the parking lot could potentially cause the story to lag for a moment, and lose viewers. There were a number of parts like this. I think the main thing I would suggest is a faster pace – cutting unnecessary shots and not staying on any one shot too long. Hope that is helpful!
    Keep up the awesome work!

    P.S. – Have you heard of Tomorrow’s Filmmakers, the online Christian film academy? It is really great. It is also very expen$ive, but they do have some free videos on there youtube channel here: https://www.youtube.com/channel/UCK8a56y4aVNhlpsJ1f3ZA4Q and a free webinar that plays a couple times a day here: https://events.genndi.com/register/818182175026322171/543638636c/?_ga=2.189528939.1315849907.1559662402-1584130492.1542722391, if you are interested.

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    1. Alright! Thank you very much for thoughts on the film! ๐Ÿ™‚
      Yes, we actually heard about Tomorrow’s Filmmakers just a few weeks after we finished filming A Tangled Web. And we’ve been a part of the academy for a little over a month. I really like Justus’ style of teaching!

      We have learned so much from his courses!

      Thank you! ๐Ÿ™‚

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      1. Oh! That’s great that you are subscribed to the academy! Yes, I love Justus’s style too, and he has so much practical filmmaking know how.

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        1. Oh! I am sorry. I just now saw your response, like…15 days after! I am not currently part of the academy, although I was for a while last year. (They used to have a monthly subscription.) I unsubscribed because of time restricting issues like school. I hope to sometime get the lifetime subscription, but that may be a while down the road. ๐Ÿ˜€

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        1. I’m sorry, it’s working for me. Can you open up something else with audio, and see if that has the problem as well? Let me know, because this will show if it is our video host that is having a problem or not.

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  6. I haven’t noticed very many inconsistencies in the movie, although like Dincolor said, I saw somebody in the background who was not supposed to be there (towards the climax of the film). Also the fighting scenes were not so realistic, but of course better safe than sorry! ๐Ÿ™‚ But this was done pretty well for the first try! May God give you the right income for your new movie, Elijah, David, Noah, and the rest of the crew!

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  7. About that missing hat, it can be that Dirk knew that he had to fight his pursuer, so he took it off in the car so that it won’t get in the way, then he put it back on when he returned.
    I really like your roles as Dirk and Mr. Judson, Elijah!! ๐Ÿ™‚

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